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Unregistered
10-18-2002, 06:32 AM
good story
Unregistered
10-18-2002, 10:33 PM
good a 5
erotic51
10-19-2002, 04:22 AM
Thanks guys, glad you enjoyed the stories and I hope you read the others I wrote and posted. Why don't you register, its free and that way we know a little more about you. :)
Unregistered
10-20-2002, 04:19 PM
Hand in hand
erotic51
12-30-2002, 04:34 PM
its nice to see people are still reading my stories, thank you. :)
Unregistered
02-06-2003, 03:24 PM
That is a great story. I think it shines above the rest.
Unregistered
02-13-2003, 08:09 PM
It's not illegal to have commas, dots and stuff in there. Make it a little more organized. The story was good, but it would have been better if it was a little bit more easy to read.
erotic51
02-20-2003, 03:34 AM
~ Unregistered ~ Glad you enjoyed and I hope you find my other stories. :)

~ Unregistered ~ pray tell me how I could improve? :)

PS, its free to join this group and it's fun, so why not register? :)
Unregistered
02-25-2003, 02:17 PM
It started off on the couch watching tv but then he "threw her over the bed"???
erotic51
02-26-2003, 02:28 AM
~ Unregistered ~ I think you have the wrong story, "threw her over the bed"???. where do I write that? The setting is in the bedroom right from the start. ("Then turning sideways, putting one foot on the bed, Kim looked directly into my....") anyway, thanks for taking the time to read and then write a reply, abet it be to the wrong story. :)

ps it would be nice if you also had a name and registered with the group, it's free you know.