The Commuter: Feedback

[Aqua]

Excellent story of a chance encounter. Good job pascal!

Read it here. (http://216.150.68.37/forums/showthread.php?t=28964)

[pascal]

Excellent story of a chance encounter. Good job pascal!

Read it here. (http://216.150.68.37/forums/showthread.php?t=28964)

Thank you very much Aqua. A first attempt, so hopefully i will improve with practice.

[wyndhy]

yup....love the eye contact stuff, too. nice touch. terrific short story!

there's nowhere to go but...uhm... up. :D

[pascal]

:) i better start working on that up bit next, lol

and thank you