Any Feedback on "A Slaves Reward"???

[Daddys_girl]

I was wondering if anyone would be willing to give me any feedback on my first story I have ever posted here called "A Slaves Reward". I am a little nervous and I welcome all criticism-whether it's good, bad or ugly.
I would also like to write more, but would like some help "cumming" up with a topic. I like to write about serving my Master but since I am so submissive and am letting the proverbial "creative juices flow" He won't be angry as long as they make Him hard too. I am a true submissive and pleasure is the name of my game.

Thanks so much.
Licks and lollipops,
Daddys_girl[COLOR=deeppink];)

[Aqua]

I liked the story quite a bit. I am not so much into Domination stories, but this was not overdone. And I really liked the anal aspects of it. I look forward to seeing another story from you.