Just looking for some feedback or opinions on my story.




http://www.pixies-place.com/forums/...ead.php?t=33136

Personally, I liked the story but not the underlying message that you can treat a BBW like shit because she has to take what she can get. That was degrading and not in the sexy way some BDSM stories are told. I am a big person so I am biased. On the other hand, you did continue to refer to how talented and appreciated she was. I think it all came off a little convoluted which I know for some will work, as it comes off as inner conflict/turmoil.

I like the idea of a business traveler who has a favorite "go to" girl when he reaches different cities. Maybe you could make this a series??? MFF in Austin, Boi in Philadelphia, Sub in Boston, Mistress in Miami...

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I didnt mean for it to sound like she was taking all she could get. I was more eluding to the fact that this particular woman would do anything to please me because she wants me to leave my wife for her, and yes this is a true story and I have only changed her name and the city she lives in. I don't mean to offend BBW anywhere. They are some of the sexiest women in the world and they should all know that. Thanks for your feedback and I hope my next story, if I write one, treats you a little better.

I think you definitely should write one! Especially since you have personal experiences to draw from!

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The practice of putting women on pedestals began to die out when it was discovered that they could give orders better from there.~ Betty Grable

If I wanted your opinion, I'd remove the duct tape and ask you for it.~ Me
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One man's dream is another man's nightmare~~~~> §¤ Lilith ¤§
~>My Scribbles<~
==>Gone Shopping<== ~Just a Quickie~ *~A Celebration Vacation~* ~Surprises~ Sleeping With the Window Open
What Did You Do Today? Self Defense Class ~Short Sweet Snippets~ § Summer Spin § Story Challenge Submission Pajamas

I hope it's not also true that you drink half a bottle of Scotch and then DRIVE back to your hotel.

If it is true, then this is one BBW who wouldn't just kick you to the curb, but all the way to nearest police station!

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I guess you have watched too much porn in the hotel rooms. Amazing one be coherent enough to do all of that after eating and drinking a half of battle of Scotch...and still remember to write about it. And all of the anal with the BBW with no lubricant and preparation...just ramming it in! Doubt if you have ever done any of that at all. Wake up to the reality and smell the flowers.